Friday, September 03, 2010

Leaving Las Vegas

“Tink we can trust ’im, Boss?” the shifty-eyed punk asked his stocky superior. “A guy fingers his own bruddah, ain’t no tellin’ who he’s gonna bust next!”

Backed into a corner of the dank parking garage below the Strip, I noticed rats scurrying about...none bigger than me.

I’d arrived three years ago and the city immediately sunk its claws into me. Strung out on glitz, gambling, and girls, I’d done despicable things to people I loved.

As the thugs patted their Smith & Wesson bulges, I heard, “What happens in Vegas, stays in Vegas.”

I Vegas.

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My entry in the 100 Words Challenge, with the prompt, "fingers."

(The word count may appear to be a few words short, because of how ellipses affect the way the words are counted, but there are exactly 100 words me. And I know I overuse the ellipsis...almost to a fault.)


  1. I like that you wrote the dialog in dialect, makes it more genuine... and, I like using ellipses too.

  2. Love the dialogue! A short piece (of course) but still able to immerse myself in the story...

    and I love ellipses...

  3. Very Raymond Chandler...that's a compliment. Like the feel.

  4. i have to tell you...ever since captain kirk....ellipses are sexy....and i can't get enough of them.....

    actually...i think they're pretty great....too!

  5. I love ellipses...they're the best...use them all the time.

  6. well, before I get into how much i love ellipses, I'll tell you I love your 100-Word entry too. When I went to Vegas for the first time, it took about 2 days, and I too was strung out of the glitz, gambling and... well, not the girls so much.

    I do love ellipses, a lot. I even like the idea of ellipses. It's that bit of the unspoken, you know?